TheBlueStreak

Well, a little shorter than the first... I'll get the formalities out of the way: it went too fast. Now then, this really did leave me craving more details. If ...

Okay, first things first. As always it's too fast, but I'll chalk it up as style and not mention it again (here). In style, it flows; the tempo is quick, ...

Okay, You basically left the field too wide open. I'll give you a go, but PM me any specific questions; that would make it a lot easier on me. I ...

Exellent, nothing popped out at me as being awkward or off-balance. I liked this a lot. You slowed it down enough to let it flow, but not too much. It ...

Hey, First, it needs to slow down a little. Even at your pace that was quick. I can see some style in this but it honestly moves too fast to ...

Sorry, Jonny. It's just my style. Thanks, Porcelain. I love that line. See what you think about this: It's similar in style. Thanks for reading, Blue

If you haven't read me before, this may sound weird. If you have read me before, this will still sound weird, but you'll expect it. I like the way this ...

First, I liked it. All the mistakes I found were already mentioned, so I won't repeat them. I liked the walls pulsing part; I hadn't thought of living creatures as ...

Good job. I agree with the general sentiments above--fits great with the movies. I really liked the psychological simplicity of it all. Coupled with the mysteriousness of the ride, and ...

I had a hard time following who was who. Identify the characters and their names more. SeraphTree had good points about the logistics too. Otherwise it seemed sound to me, ...

By what power could anyone hold anyone else accountable if it weren't for laws? We can't just go around beating (or worse) anyone who doesn't live up to our standards. ...

Hey Sky, Welcome on-board. We only bite work around here (read my works and the reviews thereof), but we can all always do better. That's the joy of a community ...

I believe you have accurate observations, Sky. Laws complicate things, but in the face of irresponsibility, at least they provide for accountability. Blue

Banned for talking in the first place

banned for not having a winking cat avatar