TheBigCheese

Thanks Shaddowsoldier, I suppose I have put it in the wrong category of dramatic poetry when I should have put it in the erotic category. The poem wasn't anything big, ...

I agree with ROC, The story needs better grammar and better descriptions, otherwise it tends to get confusing. Brilliant imagination though, and great story plot. TheBigCheese

Hi R.O.C Enjoyed the poem Not bad for a first one. i like it how every paragraph starts with a rose. It got to me, quite emotional well done TheBigCheese

Hi Demoness, Loved the poem. and I also loved how you rhymed most of the words but still managed to keep the poem from not making sense. very clever and ...

Thanks Redleaf, cheers for the encouragement and i look forward to reading your stories regards, TheBigCheese

Thanx for your help! I found it useful Will make changes From TheBigCheese

Thanks Waitingforlife, for taking the time to read my story. It was acually an english assignment that had to fit a certain word limit, so i left some descriptions out. ...