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  • Dramatic Poetry Re: The Crime - 1

    For some reason, I couldn't really get a proper understanding or feel of this poem. I mean, I understood that it is about death, obviously, but, other than that, it ...

    Aug 6, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Monsters

    Wait, you don't normally write poetry? =O In that case, your really gifted to be able to write with such talent. There really aren't any mistakes besides the ones that ...

    Aug 6, 2010
  • Fanfiction Novels Re: The Pirate and The Sister: Chapter 1

    That's a real nice piece of work. Good job. However, there are some mistakes. These suggestions and corrections will start from the beginning of the story to the end. They ...

    Aug 6, 2010
  • Fanfiction Novels Re: Corruption - Prologue

    I stated the issues with calling the police multiple times so that the reader would understand the different reasons why they couldn't. If I didn't explain all of that, then ...

    Aug 6, 2010
  • Fanfiction Novels Re: Corruption - Prologue

    C O R R U P T I O N Prologue ______________________________________________ E ight people sat at a wooden Renaissance table in a relatively dark room; the only light this ...

    Aug 6, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Duel

    I believe that this fight could've been greatly intensified if you described things a tad more. Like, let's say, the specific movements and attacks they made to one another. That ...

    Aug 5, 2010
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Plunge

    Well, I can't really give advice or anything since this isn't your work, but I do have to say that your eight-year old has some skill. He is well on ...

    Aug 5, 2010
  • Art & Photography Re: Fly Free

    At first, I thought it was a toy parrot or something of the like... Haha. But I looked at it again, read what you wrote underneath the picture, and realized ...

    Aug 5, 2010


[as a roleplayer is feeling sad about torturing her characters] GrandWild: "You're a writer, dear. Embrace it."
— GrandWild