TheAmazon

I think this is a good, strong poem. You instantly get an image in your head, and where it rhymes, it doesn't seemed forced. I really don't have enough experience ...

Thank you!! I'll work on changing that :) It's kind of based off of a real story, but I can definitelysee how that would be unrealistic, I'll work on that ...

Thanks, to both of you! I adore criticism. My friends always pull the lazy "Ohh, I like it!" move so they don't have to proofread or insult me, and my ...