The-Phantoms-Thorne

I've read other excerpts of this on the NaNo boards and it never fails to amaze me that you are so talented. It is a very funny concept that reminds ...

There are a few punctuation errors that I noticed. For example, it is easier not to have a full stop at the end of a line of dialogue if you ...

This is quite a lovely piece. I really like your characterisation of the main characters and you have really well let the reader into Neville's head (reading that back, I'm ...

I quite liked this piece and I'm sure that there isn't anything I can say that other have said already. One thing, though. Maleficent didn't have green skin, it was ...

I think you did Misa very well (I love Death Note... thank you Brisbane Anime Society!). She really is a little nutty about Light, but you're right. Very self-assured. For ...

A couple of typos here and there, more of an oversight than anything else. Is this just a short piece, or is there more to it? Imagery is good, very ...

Since my learned friends above have given you a thorough breakdown of what you need to fix, I will just give you my perspective. I'm not sure, but have you ...

Albeit, the fact this has 'Crawford' in the title, then followed up with the word 'angel' in the first sentence had me interested (by the way, is the references to ...

I quite liked this. You characterised well, spelling and grammar was good, would have liked more input from Martha. Perhaps the Doctor noticing that she was a little more quite ...

A stunnning piece of writing by all accounts. It was moving and brilliant, but as a phanatic I have one or two points... 1. The Phantom would not be crass ...