Tessia

I wrote this poem when one of my best friends had to move to another country. I remember how the paper I had written it on was soaked in tears ...

With no desire to make you feel bad, your poem isn't very good... However, I have decided to help you and I've played around with it. I've used your main ...

It's pretty good. First of all, remember your punctuation! I've played around with your poem to add a bit more of flow. Tell me what you think; The morning sun ...

I am conscious that this isn't quite a poem, but it just wouldn't fit elsewhere. Enjoy and critique please!!! _____________ Shopping When shopping, you encounter many challenges. You enter the ...

Thanks guys! This is really helping my poem. I've changed some words and punctuation and all of your feedback seems to work very well. A last thing, I've noticed that ...

Nice! I really enjoyed it. There's one main thing to correct; punctuation! Remember to add your commas, periods, and if needed exclamation and question marks. I'd also like to add ...

This was the first "real" poem I ever wrote. I was about 11... I know it's way too abstract and obsolete, and I know many people don't agree, but jeeze, ...

It's not bad. I found it pretty intense but it doesn't completely captivate the reader. As Squallz said, your poem is rather a rewrite of many ideas that already exist. ...

It's a rather entretaining story. Please do check your spelling mistakes and be sure to add more adjectives, for you need more descriptive manners in your story. As for the ...

I was rather bored and jotting down some of my writing. Then I suddenly thought, "are there any web sites that help and encourage young writers like me?" So I ...

Lol... well... It is definately good, but it gets a little too mixed up. However, I insist, it's pretty good and since it was your first poem, I'd joyfully rate ...

Another Lost Soul You’ve lived a life, Belonged or not belonged. You’ve lived it through; Blissful or deplorable, But then it’s over, And your desires disintegrate to debris. What have ...

*applause* Definately real. I loved how you get easly pulled in your poem and how you can't help reading it faster and faster puting more enthusiasm in it everytime. Keep ...

Funny. Yes, definately funny. I think good short poems are the best ones, for they tend to capture your attention better. Your poem is captivating and nice, but I feel ...

Great! It is very sad and deep. And as Snoink mentioned, let your beautiful poem flow and don't worry about making it rhyme. And remember, the world is full of ...