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Teoffany

  • Fantasy Novels Re: Iriad (Prologue)

    I saw "Iriad" and thought, 'cheater! You can't steal a title!' because I thought the title was Illiad. Glasses, anyone? The (Narrator) No need to tell us there's a narrator ...

    Jun 10, 2008
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Return to Milantis

    No real complaints except for two things. For one, whenever there's a new speaker, you need a new paragraph. I think that's already been covered. Also, when someone makes a ...

    Jun 10, 2008
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Prince of Agharta - chapter one

    It's a line-by-line! I stole the idea from another website. Let me know if anything's unclear. Rain fell woefully, the sound of it's its relentless dance filled the hollow lane. ...

    Jun 10, 2008
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Wasteland: Prologue

    The beginning immediately threw me off. Instead of showing me Lenard's apprehension about what he's doing, you tell me about it, and lose a critical opportunity to build your character's ...

    May 12, 2008
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: An Overveiw of Elves

    Elves are a type of fey that has [have] developed a very physical existence. They belong to the Seelie court but have integrated extremely [add the modifier "well" here or ...

    May 12, 2008
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hello From the Latest New Person

    Hello YWS! The name is Teofania (Teo, for short), and I like to, well, write. I write mostly science fiction, though I do step into fantasy sometimes. I've been writing ...

    May 11, 2008


Knowledge is knowing a tomato is a fruit; wisdom is not putting it in a fruit salad.
— Miles Kington