Tenyo

First sentence: Even though we thing of eyeglasses as a single object, the glass lenses for which they are named are plural, so he should place 'them.' 'His alarm clock ...

Huuuge tip! Never underestimate a title. A piece that was written out of boredom, and so carelessly that it doesn't even have a title, is not going to find reviews. ...

littlebrother.jpg It's always the tiny feet that make the muddiest footprints And the little mouths that make the loudest noises It's the shortest arms that give the warmest hugs and ...

I love it, though I'm not sure why. The language you use is amazing. I think I'll probably have a browse through your portfolio after this. "Somewhere twisted tyrants appease. ...

Owe, I'm dying to know what happens next. I think perhaps this needs a bit more of a build up to it. Once Scrape and Talon are introduced things pick ...

Colourblind The sound of blades and guns and bombs Leak from the battlefield Like blood from the eyes of soldiers. Blood that stains hands of leaders Who lock their hearts ...

I love it! The strange title instantly made me curious. The poem is well written, and I especially liked the way you've brought the elements and troubles together. The concept ...

I love it! The rhythm in this is beautifully light. Apart from what has already been said, 'noting,' in the last verse should be 'nothing.' I would say you could ...

Short and sweet, but perhaps a little too short. Unfortunately formatting never works very well on yws unless you go into the reply screen, and I'm afraid I found it ...

This poem has a great start to it, but the second verse kills the rest. The repitition of 'like' carries on until half way through the second verse, which is ...

I've completely exhausted my list of names and name-websites, so here's my next attempt. You guys name them for me :) For Nano I'm thinking up my characters, but not ...

The 'yet' in the first paragraph seems slightly out of place. I think it's because of the punctuation. Giving the word its own clause makes it seem more important than ...

Calling All Heroes _ There's a boy who stands against the wall smoking away his days. He doesn't love; and doesn't care. Someone beat that out of him somewhere along ...

Hey there, welcome to YWS! I don't really understand what's going on here. I'm getting three different images of a forest scene, a colosseum and a pair of lovers. Unless ...

Hey Alpha " "Serena?” A voice called out to me. " - Try not to use the term 'a voice,' it makes it seem like just any random voice, which ...