Tenyo

Hey Sare I like this poem :) It was very sweet, and it gave a really good insight to the relationship between you and Lou. The only thing is that ...

Hey Iwrite First of all, you're brave to add 'pointless' as a choice on your poll XD I would say this piece of work falls into none of those catagories. ...

Hey Kaywiia *Triple checks spelling* I love this piece! It's so sweet. It reminds me a little of the poem 'Blackberry Picking' by Seamus Heaney- not sure if you've heard ...

Hey Skutter I really like what you're doing here with the script, and there's nothing really to comment on about the writing, but the presentation itself has a few things ...

Hey Sas Overally this is remarkably well written, especially for someone of your age. I really enjoyed reading it. The pacing is good, the plot develops very well. The characters ...

Hey BrokenWing I wasn't really feeling it, to be honest. There was a lot of bloodlust, and I got the idea, but there was nothing that really caught my attention ...

Hey Siona I think this piece is too safe. It seems like you've got the basics, but not much else. You've told us little about the environment or the characters, ...

Hey Dante. This poem is quite... depressing. The language is good and it's well written, but the subject in general is one that's best to avoid. Every day a lot ...

Hey Ellie :D Crucial Rule No.1: Show don't tell. This whole piece has an aweful lot of telling. You've set up the scene and included dialogue, but after that the ...

((Ladies and gentlemen, I present to you the next generation of self degradation.)) Hey Tenyo. Inner Editor here to review; Your Life. At first glance the structure seems a little ...

All Reviews Welcome ^_^ Lost and Found: Chapter 1: When love comes knocking Let me start in December last year- back when life was perfect. I had everything I needed, ...

Hey Black. Personally I liked the original image better. This may sound strange, but when looking at the dark one some of the more negetive words stood out, and when ...

I love it! The hook on this is amazing. I don't think I've ever felt so sympathetic towards a potential serial killer before. You've introduced the main character (or characters?) ...

Hey Lil' Pet Rock (Got to love that name.) This was difficult to read, to be honest. The grammar is all over the place, so there's a lot of places ...

Hey Firefly As a general piece of a novel this is good, but as a first chapter it is full of several flaws. Fight scenes are only good if your ...