Tenyo

I'm not here to critique, I just want to say how awesome this poem is :) Poetry these days is becoming quite bland, because it's all about misery or shock, ...

Review Part Nine! Language 'I only inquired what you were doing' is waay too formal to be using in an every day home setting. In using a sophisticated form of ...

Review Part Eight! Again I like this chapter better than the earlier ones. I think you may be better at writing drama rather than action. This one was quite nice ...

Review part seven. I have a massive request. Please, please remove the line 'You can't imagine what I feel.' It's something a grouchy teenager, or some other immature person would ...

Review Part Six! I love the opening of this chapter. The last few were quite action backed and there was a lot of blood and pain mentioned. The sudden change ...

Review Part Four and Five. Fear: Bird people aren't scared of falling, they've got wings to make sure they don't. The phrase 'a gut-wrenching fall rushed up to her face,' ...

Review part three! (I'll call it part three even though it's only part two, because otherwise I'll get confused .) Viewpoint. You can either tell the story sitting at your ...

Hey Vox! I'm here to review your novel! I guess that means you're going to have to get used to me hovering around for a while. Since this is going ...

Oh dear. I'll be blunt to start; I hate the title. There's nothing wrong with throwing political correction out the window, but saying 'the crucifix is a sex toy' is ...

Hey Kat! The thing I liked most about this story is how natural it seemed. There was no big kiss or happy ever after, in fact the moment under the ...

I'm gonna be a bit harsh, sorry. I commend you for trying something new and different! A man who never made any mistakes never made anything, right? But this seems ...

Yey! Go Wario! 3500 words in one day is epic! If I include my fanfiction-of-my-own-julno, then I've reached the 40k mark. If not, I'm on 34k, and I have a ...

Change of plan! I reached my 30,000 words (even though five thousand are part of a fanfiction of my own julno) and I've got a week before I go away. ...

Hey there Meg, welcome to yws! If you glance around through the poetry section you'll realise that this subject is a little overwritten as it is. Given that, it makes ...

I am also 5000 words behind. Come on, we can do it! *Edit to avoid double posting* Two of my characters ran off into the romance section for a few ...