Tenyo

Oo, this is slightly captivating. I like the scattered thoughts, and the poem as a whole. I'm not sure if I'm too keen on the short lines though. Because they're ...

I love it! I first looked at this poem because I thought it had an interesting title, and the poem didn't let me down. It's very creative. I love the ...

Hey Arrie! I like this. I know a chestboard and a battlefield can be a little cliched, but this was somehow different. You got your point across in a very ...

People are dropping out? That makes me feel really bad about saying that I'm also going to have to abandon this storybook. I'm not going to be on YWS much ...

Review part three! I found very little to fix in this chapter, so I'm going to be fussy. No, no. Words that a repeated consequetively need a commar in between ...

Review part two: The fight scene I'm not sure about Clays comment on the fight scene. It could be dragged out, but there's only so much you can put into ...

His eyes look like he's about to cry- that flat eyebrowed look- because the top of his head was scraped and torn in anger of a failed art project. Poor ...

There was an experiment! I can't remember who did it, but I'll post the link up if I can find it. Someone hypnotised a pair of twins. He said that ...

Amara 'I'm Amara,' she sniffled. She glanced around his room. It was bare, and tidy. That wouldn't last long. 'Who are you?' 'Kip.' 'Kip,' she repeated and looked down, resisting ...

Opening: I like the idea of the opening. It instantly gripped me. It seems to be phrased oddly though. I had to read it over a few times to understand ...

Here's a critique! The opening. I like the whole 'warm sun cool wind' thing at the beginning, it took me straight into the story. You might want to make it ...

Lex Location: Alwayslate Trainstation Date: October 10th 2010 Time: 10:20 Lex was getting nervous already. 'Where did you go?' He snapped unintentionally at Tashi. 'I had something to take care ...

Hunt Rules are Here: First person to find it gets it. Announcement: Bounty Hunt Target name: Jessie Target information: Jessie is tall and thin, with black hair. She has the ...

Bounty Hunt Rules: Only one person can complete the bounty hunt. The Hunt can be completed in any way, any place, any time. The Hunt must only take One Post. ...

"Withdraw it all in notes, and glue them to the Tarris Co. walls to spell out 'you ******s,' for knocking down my house." - Gizmo. What would you do if... ...