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Hey Summer This is all very Tell but not much Show. For example, instead of saying that Scan was controlled, say that she smiled, and what impression her smile gave ...

Are curse words really that great? I think unless there is a particular purpose for using bad language and they're used sparingly, curse words are tasteless. They're like cliche's in ...

Hey there Shepherd I found this poem difficult, and I'm not sure how it can be improved. I didn't really understand what the point behind it is. Most of it ...

Juliet would claim to be suffering from a noise-induced stress disorder and pass the task on to Kitty. Kitty IS suffering from a noise-induced stress disorder and so would be ...

As the wonderful Shakespere once wrote: "A rose by any other name would still smell as sweet." It's the character that matters, not the name. Don't worry too much about ...

Hey Addawen! The opening: I love the opening of this. Not only the quotes, but the way you've used them to introduce your character. It grabbed my attention and instantly ...

Hey there Bigfoot! The first thing I found about this was it was difficult, and daunting to read. One of the things you must be aware of is your audiance. ...

I kind of like this. I think I would like it more as a short story though. It has a good narrative to it, but not the kind that is ...

I like it! This poem is a little short, but it works. I can't think of anything to be critical about, and I think if I were to list my ...

I love it! This is hilarious. I feel obliged, since this is a critique, to comment on one thing. Hogwarts is a school for witches and wizards, and you don't ...

Is this supposed to be a comedy? I can't really tell. The 'silky, sexy voice' and 'sculptured chest' made me laugh though. Some parts reminded me of those old James ...

I love this! I'm a fan of pixel art in general, but these ones made me smile. The little village is cute. It reminds of something you would see on ...

Hiya! I'm going to be extreme on this. First of all, this is all too narrative. 'I did this, then I did this, then I did that.' I used to ...

Hiya! The first picture with the tape over the mouth is a bit of a cliched idea, I'm not really sure what to think of it. I guess it just ...

Umm... Wow? This is... I'm not sure what to make of it XD It sounds very logical and contemplatively written. There are some parts I don't understand, but... I guess ...