Tenyo

Another step in overcoming my photophobia - a combined tribute to my latest Kinder Egg toy. Indeed, this came out of an egg that's about the size of one of ...

Alexis is only five? Or have I gotten confused between characters? The way she acts and responds makes her seem much, much older. I think it might be better for ...

A good first chapter :) I love the description in this, especially of the storm. The constant reference to it really helps to maintain the atomosphere, and I could quite ...

Hey Kana, happy review day! Sorry it took so long to get round to this. First thing I'll say is that this is an awesome prologue! I was gripped from ...

Hey Dreamwalker! Right, what to do with this... As a piece I like this, but I'm not sure if it's a good prologue. It might sit better as an advert ...

Sorry for the delay, here's review 1.2 I lvoe the characters you've created. They all have their own very distinct personalities, quirks and habits. Either you've put a *lot* of ...

Hey Dude! Sorry for the delay. First thing: you know what sucks? When people give you lots of reviews for the first chapter, but by the time you get three ...

Here goes nothing. Repitition? Repitition is something you always have to beware of, in any form of it. All though this you have used repeated punctuation, which even though it ...

When I changed my password on YWS, it didn't change on WriterFeedPad, and there doesn't seem to be a way to change it on both. I don't think it's too ...

Here's a link to 'Mummy's little bear-' which is a fantasy short story, if you happen to have some time free.

Life was never easy for Little Bear - Mummy Bear loved her very much. It may seem strange that these two things should be together, after all, for Mothers to ...

[If you're not up to date with the story, this chapter is pretty much self explanitory. All you need to know is that Henri is my young cousin who I ...

Chapter three! Small talk and chit chat It's alright for every day situations, but in a novel you need a bit more background noise. All this chapter seems to do ...

Me again! Again, a good chapter, something definately to work on, but it does need work. What's where now? I'm getting confused. The vague sense of environment and scenary are ...

I'm back! So, chapter one. It's a little less exciting than the prologue- so much that I'm glad the prologue is there as a hook. Without it this chapter wouldn't ...