Teddybear

Thanks for the help. All I seem to be getting is a bunch of critiques on my grammar, so I guess that's a good thing, better than having a weak ...

I hadn't gotten around to the grammatical stuff yet, thanks.

You're very welcome.

Alright then

Great story, well written. For once I don't have a problem with sentence structure and word choice, well done. Your only issues seem to be with description and exposition. I'll ...

Overall, it's a good story, I'm just a little nitpicky when it comes to sentence structure and wording, so there are a few things I would like to point out. ...

By now I suppose you will have read chapter 3 and would understand some of the terms a little better. I get the whole thing about not explaining though, I'm ...

You are very welcome, this is kinda a brain break for me during school so I probably need it as much as you (my brain never really takes a break, ...

Okay, like I said, do as you please, I'll be over in my little corner creating my own universes and mass mur- I mean -giving lovely lives and existence's to ...

My suggestion would be to mention wizards earlier, normalize them, and don't second guess yourself when you do (believe me, the readers can tell) like, maybe have her think about ...

I only have a few problems. My first problem is, too much tell. You didn't show hardly anything. It's all, 'here's what happened, this is how a feel about it' ...

OHhhhhhhhhhhh, now that makes sense.

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HA HA HA HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH. Okay, okay, I'll calm down now. First off, I love Edna, her perspective is rather interesting to read and she keeps things entertaining even when the ...

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HA HA HA HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH. Okay, okay, I'll calm down now. First off, I love Edna, her perspective is rather interesting to read and she keeps things entertaining even when the ...

I have actually watched that channel, and you're right, it's hilarious. I hope you get into the creative writing class, but, just from my experience, public school classes on ANYTHING ...