Teardrop

Hi! Teardrop here! I'm gonna try and review this before I have to leave for a school dance tonight, sorry if this seems rushed. beause "because" You know," He began ...

Hey! Teardrop here, welcome to YWS by the way. : D I made mistakes red. My comments are in blue. Torin I shoved my hands against the door, watching the ...

Hey Jessica, here to review! My eyes fluttered open to stare into the vibrant blue eyes of a young lady. Her light and gentle smile lit up across her pale ...

Hello! Teardrop here! I'm not going to be of much help, since this is very well written but I'll take a shot at it. I fallowed you everywhere, "fallowed" is ...

Hi! It's Teardrop. Oh, and I love your avvie by the way! : D Rubber Ducks are awesome! I haven't done a lot of reviews on poetry but I'll give ...

Hi! I'm Teardrop. First of all, I really like this so far. I think you have an awesome plot going on, keep it up. "Closeing" from the title does not ...

Hi! I liked this a lot. It was really sweet and dreamy, it made me forget all the bad things life had to offer for just a second. It's so ...

I like it so far. I can see improvments from the previous version. I think the little prologue thingy is still quite short though, but it does help explain a ...

Hi! Teardrop here! Corrections are in bold, comments are in red. His beautiful green eyes Bore into my soul “I don’t want to fight anymore” That’s what he says to ...

Hi! I like this, I think it has loads of potential! It seemed like you used the word "it" a lot. Instead of using "it", tell us what "it" is! ...

Hi! First of all, I realized a completely common problem; show and not tell. As Skins said. : D Anyway, I would try and tell us a little bit about ...

Hi! First of all, this was very difficult to read because of the way it's spaced. You should space this out more so it's easier to read. Also, when there ...