Teague

Haha. I'm pretty much amazing. *bows* I yawn quietly and lean over to look at Olivia’s book. You and your tense jumping! *smites* Should be "I yawned." =P “That’s great,” ...

Boing! My stomach hurts. For the fourth time today. And this is Chapter Four. Symbolic much? =/ Anyway... *shoves foot in mouth* “I hate you!” I screamed at dad. “I ...

*dances* Chapter Three! (The first time I typed that, it came out as "Chapter Tree.") “Happy Birthday to you!” I'd put the whole song in, for emphasis. Unless they're not ...

Chapter Two! Yay! My mum says this is good. She read it while I was in the bathroom. xD She was the only one of my friends who I had ...

*waves* Hey Choco! ¿Que pasa? =D Yay! You have five chapters of this up. First place in the Instructors Critique Contest, here I come. =P I stood on the third ...

Hi there! I haven't seen you around YWS before. Ahoy! My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. =D "Hello." She greeted the stupid animal. Quick grammar ...

Hey Yoda! Ironically, I had put this in my "To Critique" folder at home before you left it in my blog. Looks like I made a good choice, no? ^^ ...

Hey Yoda! Ironically, I had put this in my "To Critique" folder at home before you left it in my blog. Looks like I made a good choice, no? ^^ ...

Hey Loose! Yay for you, you're my first critique of the day. I don't think I've read anything of yours before? That should be remedied! ^^ A burning blanketed her ...

The first one makes me smile -- is that slightly horrible of me? xD The second one... oh, that expression is priceless. Yay you for capturing it! Lol. Your mum ...

Hello lakegirls! *waves* Congratulations, you're my 14th review of the night. xD Anyway... Your intro: I think you should definitely flesh it out a bit. You could do a little ...

I can't believe I haven't posted this yet. Meh. This is a really good way to check your sentence fluency in your writing. My 8th grade English teacher had us ...

Hello there! I don't think I've seen you around YWS before. Welcome! My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. *waves* Okay... well, this could use some ...

Wowza. I really love #1, 2, and 5. I love how you can see the spider web on the 5th one. The first one, I love how close it is ...

Woot! Parte Tres! Don't ask why I'm randomly using Spanish because I understand it less than you do. She wrapper her arms around Zek and the snow leopard purred loudly. ...