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Lin, I've always thought your abstract writing style was brilliant. ;) This... is one of those pieces. It really sets the mind in motion, which is something I've been looking ...

Chapter Two! :D Yay my mad critting spree. Lol. I hurt all over, every time I swallowed it felt like someone had stuffed a handful of sand down my throat. ...

Yo yo yo, Gwen! I said I'd get to the rest of this eventually. ;) They bent fearfully close to me and clawed at my clothing. The placement of the ...

Hey Gwen! I promised, therefore I deliver! :D *Random note* Is there a reason why there's a new paragraph thing for each line? over her smooth slopping shoulder, Sloping shoulder* ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. *bows* Holy cow... the first area you need to work on is definitely your ...

Hihihi! Have we met? Meh! I meet so many people I can't keep track. I'm Saint, and I shall be your critiquer today! :D It had been a very long ...

Hello there! I haven't seen you around YWS before. My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D That day beamed bright and cold. "The day" would ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS. My name is Saint. =D Here on YWS, we have a rule about doing 2 critiques for every piece of literature you post. Please be ...

Hello! Have I introduced myself to you before? Can't remember. Anyway, hi! I'm Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D Her dark wig made the heat unbearable and ...

Thanks for fixing your formatting! Glad I could help. :D Quick grammar note -- each time the dialogue switches from one character to another, it needs to be a new ...

Yo yo yo Yoda! Woo obscure Weird Al references. Heh. xD Anyway... the second one is definitely my favourite. But seriously, how the blazes do you live in conditions that ...

Ahoy there! Don't think I've seen you around YWS before. My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D ...There's not much to critique here. Er, anyway. ...

Ahoy there! I haven't seen you around YWS before. My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D The kindness Will was showing her filled her small ...

Hello again Fishy! *waves* Yay for porridge, eh? ;) *reads* as she smelt what had been left for her breakfast. Smelled* Faye retorted dryly, "you have nothing to eat in ...

Yo yo yo, Little Tin Fishy! *waves* It was a decidedly sickening feeling, and the main reason why Klar never frequented the clubs; regardless of where they were. Something about ...