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Punctuation, spelling, and grammar are your friends. There's hardly anything here. No real ideas, no real plot, no real character descriptions. Just people running around for no seemingly logical reas

This does sound a lot like an opening paragraph. I'd like to see more before I can give you a proper critique. Oh and you misspelt "barbarians." -St. Razorblade

^^i'm sorry you have a poor sex life. Haha, it doesn't bug me. I'm only 14 anyway. :P

George Orwell. No contest.

Well, if they are only pushing one religion, then I find this an unconstitutional use of taxpayer money. You can't indoctrinate through the government. However, if they were to accept ...

9.5/10 Cute.

I just had a flashback to the beginning of 8th grade. :shock: We did this on paper in my social studies class. I have the same results. =/ Toward the ...

That book is fantastic. At first I thought it was fiction but when I found out it was true, I cried for 15 minutes. If I remember right, I read ...

I apologise in advance if any of this has already been said. In his youth he blossomed, growing greater and greater in wisdom, learning and perceiving reality to depths that ...

I'm sorry if I repeat what anyone else has said. Time is against me at the moment. “Why?” the young boy said weakly. Here's a rule for you. Never, ever ...

A site I just found through my language arts class that's completely free is Hope that's helpful.

Pretty good. Put more. Add detail. People like to have a background in order to understand the setting. Tell what's happening. But, I think you have a great start and ...

Oh my gosh. :oops: There's a reason why it doesn't make sense. For some reason the computer I was using hiccupped and cut off half of the prologue! *dies* I'll ...

Well, I changed it, so this is more or less of a bump, which I'm totally ashamed of. :oops:

My great-aunt is obsessed with geneology, and if I knew how she does it I'd tell you. She gets everything, paper documents, photographs, etc. It's pretty hardcore, but I dunno ...