Tayler

Welcome! I'm relatively new too, but don't worry about posting your stuff! Everyone here is extremely helpful and nice, and the critique they offer does loads for your writing if ...

She looked behind her should er and groaned. I'd go with "over her shoulder". It just flows better. Sitting on another desk, legs crossed, was Iyten, a man most women ...

Not rude, but of course makes sense to you. You are the writer, the one who developed this story. Therefore you know her. You know her past, her feelings, her ...

Hm, I like this! Since its short, I'm going to try to be super thorough and helpful (and hack it up, as you ordered haha). Hopefully, it works! :D Do ...

I wrote this for a creative writing class last year, and just found it on my computer...figured I'd see what people thought. The short story that followed was terrible, so ...

I haven't been on in a few days, mostly because I sprained my ankle and have been busy with other things. However, now that its spring break and we have ...

Hi! :) I'll try and be thorough here, hopefully its actually helpful. ;) Red is just changes I'd recommend, then I'll put comments and other suggestions. First, I want to ...

A review, as requested. :) Its already been pretty thoroughly reviewed, so I'm just going to do the generals. First, be VERY careful of run-on sentences. You have a lot ...

Okay, so just going to post this here. First, thank you much for the reviews. :D I will say, he is supposed to sound very mature for his age, which ...

Chapter Two The only light in the room was a lamp that flickered in the corner of the cramped room. Two chairs huddled close to the worn couch between them, ...

Since this is short, I'll try and be really thorough. :) Red = minor spelling/grammar correction. If that's not what you wanted, sorry! Wind raised the long curls off the ...

I was wondering, if you had time would you mind reviewing this ? I did some big editing and would love to know if its an improvement at all. Thank ...

Hey Kafka, I was wondering if you'd perhaps have time to review my edited prologue/chapter one ? Its the start of a fantasy novel. :) If you have time, thank ...

Hello there! :) My review, and I read without once think about stereotypes or anything. Personally, I don't care as long as something is well done and catches my attention. ...

Okay, I am here for a review! I'll try and be as helpful as possible. Hope it works. ;) First, I think you should break paragraphs more. These tend to ...