TaylaChase

Hi, This was really good and flowed along smoothly. who roams the blue-black floors Personally (and this is just my opinion here) I would just put one color or the ...

Hi, This was really good! “Pain without love.” Three Days Grace This part confused me. wiped off the dirt from the road This part makes it sound like she wiped ...

Hi This was really good! I couldn't find much wrong with it except you don't really put enough character detail or depth. Also it doesn't have much actually happening. Many ...

Hi This was really good! I like the way you wrote it. He leant casually against Hattie’s locker, his attention fixed only on me. I think you meant 'he leaned ...

Hi, This was really good! I enjoyed it. I did find some things you could change, though. he asked, and I nodded, grateful not to be walking alone. I would ...

Hi This was really good and I liked it a lot! I did find a few things, though. I liked your idea so far and it really captivated the reader. ...

You guys are all so pretty...I'm jealous. ~The ever ugly me (aka Tayla)

Hi This is kind of short for me to be able to do a nice long review, but I'll do my best. :D I just did not know. I would ...

Hi I liked your story, It was very captivating! 'as they stared out our passing car.' 'out at our' 'he leant back' leaned 'as he leant over me' Again, 'leaned'. ...

Hiya! This was really good and I liked the way you wrote it! I have a couple of things for you that I found, though. 'a color all its one ...

Hi, This was really intriguing! It really pulled the reader in. I liked the ending, too. You say that they would get her if she even moved, but you start ...

Hi, This was very intriguing! I really liked it. The way you wrote it really draws the reader in. ...a soldier, dirty, grim and with leery eyes.... This is just ...

Hi I really like your idea on this story! I think you should continue on it and make it longer. It was a little short, but that's okay I guess. ...

Hi, Zanna! I really liked your story! I did find a few nitpicks for you, though. sorrow in it’s song It should be 'its' to take it’s journey Again, 'its' ...

Hi That was good, I was intrigued. She sighed, stopped, turned to look up at him. You should put 'and' instead of a comma after 'stopped'. Also you call the ...