Tatu

I like your poem allot, although one thing that keeps taking me out of the story is you repeatedly say: Never, Neverland In my opinion, the poem would flow better ...

I, personally, have never felt like that, but you certainly made it understandable. I really like this piece and i would like to read more of your work, but i ...

Wow that is one of the best pieces i have read in a LONG time, i would really like to see a continuation of this. :)

Thank you all for your helpful comments :) I will try to improve my grammar and use more age appropriate wording.