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Re: Don't Hate The Gamer - Scene One
With this, you have large chunks of characters speaking. It all reads as one solid thing, so maybe not where they pause?
Jul 6, 2010 -
Re: Geek o' Gaming: Part Two
Strong the force is in you, Grammar Nazi. *edits*
May 5, 2010 -
Re: That's So Edward
Very nice! I hate twilight, and I guess 'Edward Cullen' does too. I enjoyed him bashing twilight while she was sure that he was Cullen. The movie title was good ...
Mar 3, 2010 -
Re: Meth=Death
*sniffle* That was so touching. I've known people who know people who do it, and this is how I've heard it tends to go. First it's nice, and the music ...
Oct 20, 2009 -
Re: Sing me a song, my sweet Morgrant. Pages 1-3
*Jumps backwards* I'm glad that I almost got you killed..? I will, I will, just let me get caught up on morning doings... *Mumbles unhappily about writing another three pages.*
Oct 6, 2009 -
Re: Letters Chapter 1 & Prologue
I could tell you poured your soul into this. You put it into the oven. And now you have a rose... pie... soul... thing. In other words it was really ...
Sep 15, 2009 -
Re: Untitled Gay Romance
1.) You lack detail. Describe things. Make it come alive. 2.) How old is the girl in this? She doesn't seem like an adult. It is kind of creepy in ...
Sep 15, 2009 -
Re: The Life Of A Writer
It was simple. I like it like this. I just went pee, I have to go again now. Very funny, simple humor. I think you could turn this into a ...
Sep 14, 2009 -
Re: 2 pirates, 2 girls, and a very ranty vampire
It has a lack of description, still I think it's cute. I can't provide any more advice other then describe it a bit better.
Sep 14, 2009 -
Re: Star Wars: The Chatroom: Episode II
Okay. This is just like an actual chat room. Still they annoy me. So good job, you made it clear it was a chatroom. Just not my thing.
Sep 9, 2009