Tabiris

I'll have to agree, I groaned slightly at the "teenage voice" parts. But you slip a few sentences in there that I really like, it's a quirk of mine, but ...

Well I wrote the first part of this story I wrote a long long time ago, but the introduction is pretty knew. Just wanted to see if people are intrigued ...

Wish I knew what else to say. The story tiptoes around a relationship that the main character has with this girl, probably centered around a love affair between someone and ...

My critique won't be quite so in depth. There's no printer in my apartment and I can't go line by line on the computer. But I can give you my ...

I would have to agree with the poster above: well written, but emotionally isolating for the reader. You can write, which is wonderful. Your descriptions are crisp and you get ...

Hello all! For the past year I have been terrified of blank screens, but I finally got up my courage and braved that awful white to do something new...non-fiction! I ...