TJEvans

Thank you, cjscoot. I have taken what you have said under advisement, fixed some to your review, and left some how I had originally written it. Thank you very much ...

As he stood there, he could not remember who he was. He could not remember where he'd grown up; his mother's face; his father's name. He could not remember where ...

He Lusts For Imperfection Even Now I would have you speak of unkind truths, please: not sunshine on the window-glass and soft gloved hands to guide me thus and so, ...

Mm, yes, I find I do finally lose all discontent with this poem after switching it. The internal rhyme makes it just as memorable line as any other, which is ...

Ah, yes. I'm quite thankful for the extensive review. Before I posted it up here, nearly every response to it was one of exclamation with no criticism. I think part ...

This day is gilt in silver, where once the light was gold, And all around me minute droplets hang upon the cold. Its shimmering astounds me, and makes my footsteps ...

A flash—ignite! Burn the heavens! Tear that foul streak across the sky! Down here I stare up as it deadens, And I can’t bring myself to cry. The spark implodes, ...

I like it. Sue me. In fact, I really like it. I think it's poetry. It feels like poetry. It sounds like poetry. poetry: 1. the art of rhythmical composition, ...

I like this already, I shall say first. Complicated, but she could do it. She ground her teeth. Anything to get rid of the damn government. This seems rather sudden, ...

-shifty eyes- -slides onto this board NOT stalker-like at all- I also tend to read rules, so I've already accomplished two reviews and haven't yet decided an item to post. ...

For the Elements of Nature Contest. He paced. Every once in a while, he would stop, slump over the table, supported by his locked elbows, staring down at an empty ...

haha at first when you said that my post was scary, I thought you meant that I was scary. And I felt a tad insulted but then I saw that ...

First of all: Welcome to YWS, Tanner! Secondly, I must say that I was in the middle of a chemistry problem and I only came on to YWS to sooth ...

Okay, admittedly, now I'm just going to troll through your writing obsessively. I say again, I adore this. The lengthened lines are a tad cumbersome to work with before you ...

I have to disagree with all but the last two comments--this is absolute brilliance. I do so adore the strict, rigid rhyme scheme--it helps the words to flow off the ...