T-bird

This is really one dark poem. You get the feeling through, the last line works well as a punch line too. I'd like to see more structure in the poem, ...

I really like the message you're giving through this poem. The first few rhymes are great, and make the poem beautiful. The last few rhymes on the other hand, is ...

Hi, I'm T-bird. I'm looking forward to start posting here, and to read others work.