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Alright, I'll admit it - I am simply horrible at poetry. But every once in a while I get the strangest urge. Why the urge wants me to do poetry, ...

Hi, Kylan. I noticed that you had no critiques, so I wanted to help you a bit. Ok, I want to tell you that this was... absolutely perfect. I absolutely ...

Feeling like you've lost a friend, You sit alone, Waiting for something But your not sure what. Sitting in the darkness, Eyes shut, Only your presence Saves the room from ...

Hey. I agree with the first reply. It's a really good poem except that it needs rhtym.A poem without it is just a couple of lines. This would be a ...

Yeah. I echo the others. This is a really nice start, although way too short. You really need to expand on it. Otherwise this just isn't enough to be fantastic. ...

I didn't hear about this in the news, but I guess it would've been heartwrenching. This poem was beautiful. It clearly painted a vivid picture in my mind of what ...

Yeah. This isn't really a poem. If it is, I reckon it should have stanzas. But yeah. Sorry. :) :Sythe:

Cool. This is so true. Freaking drugs, haha. I really liked this poem - I figure it's the best on the site that I've read so far. And that's saying ...

I'm afraid I'd have to agree with aetstar. This poem lacked... substance. All it did was tell us about the guy's boring life. How not interesting! Some pointers: ~ Tell ...

Haha. I feel the same way about Algebra 2... I didn't catch anything wrong with this. I really loved the whole Hell thing in there. It made it really funny ...

I really like the flow of this poem. It had a really pronounced beat to it which made it irrististable! Great job. My favorite stanza is the third because well... ...

#9 number nine with words as pale as moonlight he paints a paradox so pretty, they worship the perplexity and fail to see the funeral so rich and dead before ...

Firestarter, Thank you so much for the review. It's really encouraging! I agree with you. The English accent doesn't really make much sense if it's in Paris... haha. But thanks. ...

Haha. I didn't quite understand any of that, partly because I think it's been using YWS people. I really liked it. It was funny. You could use some detail in ...

Black Cat Sachiko, This took me forever to read. I've been sitting at this computer for like twenty minutes... But it was amazing. Your language, your descriptions, they are just ...