Swires

I really enjoyed this it was one of the few I read to the end. I love the imagery at the start and how you create mystery around the boy. ...

I love making up my own currencies.

I arnt a fan of myspace purely because I would sooner create my own website, good,clean code. MySpace just isnt original and I couldnt care less about joining it.

Was Hell's Tools really THAT bad? LOL! Thanks for the comments.

This is SPAM, ignore and dont press the link. I like the story, it was interesting.

I liked this also, I too enjoyed Lis' speech.

Thanks for the critique, yes a lot of grammar errors because I havn't been writing in a long time.

Add some spacing and I will return

Being an Englishman I find nothing funny than British wit, I didn't find this witty at all.

((Again, the manuscript format paragraph style doesnt like the forums. PLease excuse untidy paragraphs)) Raptor sidled across the dead farm he and his wife owned, he cringed at the smell ...

LOL! Yes it does, the Prologue needs to be rewritten actually as before I plotted the story the prologue was already there.

Sorry I meant Whose point of view, as in which character. Yes, later on Masus background will come into light and hopefully I can change your mind. I always have ...

Thanks for the crit, Ill be sure to clean up my grammar and try and linearise(is that a word? LOL!) the time zone, they are supposed to be in sort ...

Thats one big mamma of a crit!

Yes Masus as a grown up is the main villain in a victorian type worled Fantasy I am writing. I wanted the reader to understand how he became the way ...