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Re: Children of Tokua. Chapter One. Part One
T_T I have a lot of work to do with this one.
Thu Dec 25, 2008 8:11 pm -
Re: Children of Tokua. Chapter One. Part One
Thanks Andy! Yeah, I plan to rewrite this scene and then have you all recritique it. I plan to blow your socks away! hehehehe. :twisted: Thanks for your advice too. ...
Wed Dec 24, 2008 3:16 pm -
Re: Shift
Hmmm...This was very disappointing. You should post at least 500 words so readers can follow something. I can't comment on this.
Wed Dec 24, 2008 12:35 am -
Re: Children of Tokua. Chapter One. Part One
Thank you everyone for your critiques! They're quite helpful and I'll be sure to take all the advice to improve this part. I guess I left too much to the ...
Tue Dec 23, 2008 1:31 am