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  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Shift (Chapter 1)

    The blinding sun shone through my window, casting a bright light on my face. I squinted, threw the covers off of my body, stood up, and prepared for the day. ...

    Dec 27, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Other Bodhi (For Justin)

    Hi There, I'm Suzu. Here are my thoughts: Dead at the same time they traveled together. The wheel of karma had spun them completely free, and up into the stuff ...

    Dec 13, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: 27 - Chapter One

    1.) Violet was one of the finest planets in the three systems; resources under the fertile ground; the water-, helium- and oxygen-rich atmosphere similar enough to Earth’s to sustain human ...

    Dec 11, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Dark Goddess [9]

    Hi Moriah, I'm Suzu. This is my first time reading this, but here are my thouhgts: 1.) She couldn’t make sense of them and the failure of William’s scheme [omit ...

    Dec 9, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Prologue Thingamajigger

    Hi there, I'm Suzu. Here are my thoughts: 1.) For best mates, Reggie and I argue a lot. If I like mint-chocolate-chip ice cream, she has to say that strawberry ...

    Dec 8, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Not my Own Chapter 1

    Hey there, I'm Suzu. Here are my thoughts: 1.) My mother holds my death sentence in her hands. [This is a nice hook for a first chapter because it makes ...

    Dec 8, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Elma Appearance

    Are you doing this description as part of a writing exercise to help you picture your character or are you planning on incorporating this into your prose? I'm asking because ...

    Dec 8, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Way Down in the Hole - Prologue

    Hey Jigs, Suzu here. This was a pleasant read because you've fashioned characters with personality and you've managed to put the reader right into their heads, letting us feel everything ...

    Dec 7, 2009
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Currently Unnamed

    Hi there, my name is Suzu. Here are my thoughts: Chapter One 1.) The soft grass underfoot, the smell of flowers and the warm, bright sun had always kept Desmond ...

    Dec 7, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Untitled-- Chapter 1

    Hi there, I'm Suzu. Here are my thoughts: Jackson 1.) A part of him was surprised when he had found himself outside again, out of the small white cell, away ...

    Dec 7, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: The Messengers: 1st Chapter

    Hi there, I'm Suzu! Here are my thoughts: 1.) Shoot. The bell rings, and I have to be in Mr. Kyoski’s third period math class before the hall monitors hunt ...

    Dec 6, 2009
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Hunter Games (Ch. 1; pt. 1)

    Hi there, I'm Suzu. Here are my thoughts: 1.) The pounding of feet sounded through the night, following the light footfalls and quick breathing of their quarry. Their shouts filled ...

    Dec 6, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Blood Soaked Snow {Chapter One}

    [Hi there, I'm Suzu! Here are my thoughts.] 1.) The streets were vacant and dark. The streetlamps had all been taken away, for no one walked down these roads anymore. ...

    Dec 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: 27 - Prologue

    [Hi there, these are my thoughts!] 1.) Whispers and murmurs flowed around her liquidly [This isn't a real adverb] as she passed the throngs of workers, each too terrified to ...

    Dec 5, 2009
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: The last year...

    Okay so this is a first for me in writing science fiction. So I don't know how it will turn out.... I'll just right the beginning and if you guys ...

    Nov 5, 2009


I was weeping as much for him as her; we do sometimes pity creatures that have none of the feeling either for themselves or others.
— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights