SushiSashimi333

Okay, I think that you need to focus a little on your grammar and what you type. In "All through the town men sang and women dance and the same ...

"She watched as Katie put on dark red lipstick, another layer of paint to the face." I love that line, funny and I agree. The cliffhanger really makes me want ...

Okay, so the title an the story really had me surprised. I liked that this story is different because it leaves more room for surprise. The twist at the end ...

I really liked the way you put a lot of character into the narrator. But I think that you described everything too much. The way you structured this story was ...