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Make the fantasy world similiar to ours in many ways (technology, government, etc.) and just add the magical elements into the world too.

Jiggity, I wouldn't bother with the rest of the books in the Demonata series. It peaked with the first two books, and the rest range from 'okay-ish' to 'poor'. Well, ...

Keep you’re head down and just do the job, my sister had always said. Your. ‘part from pointing that out, I don’t really have anything else to say that hasn’t ...

Me again. =) No real nitpicks here, so I’ll go straight into the general comments: First off, I don’t like his name either. XD I couldn’t figure out how to ...

Alrighty. =) Sorry it took me so long, but I had work to do, and then I had to move back home for the holiday, and then I found I ...

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Thanks for helping me along and reviewing every single piece I posted. You're great. ^_^ Remind me to review a bunch of your stuff in return. =) Also, I find ...

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Haha, thanks again. ^_^ The thing about the length: this the just the way the story is split up, so I'm posting each section as I finish it. :P Anyway, ...

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It helped loads, as always. Thanks! =) Although, now I'm confused about the was/were thing too. =(

Thanks again. =) I'm toying with the idea of deleting the first part altogether. It's not really important to the plotline, it's just there for some thematic stuff. With it, ...

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So make a new chapter that is only a handful of paragraphs long. ^_^ There's no rule on how long chapters have to be.

It's possible to change the POV character when writing in first person. It's not too uncommon to change character like this every chapter. It helps to make it nice and ...