Sureal

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NEWS TODAY! An Odd Life Escape into Normal Life! By Bob. Two of the characters from the ever popular humorous short story, ‘An Odd Life’ , written by Sureal, recently ...

This could actually work as a side piece to your actual story :). Oh, and the title is messed up - that happens with long ones, it cuts off the ...

It's about time your reign of terror came to an end. But hey, ask me nicely and I'll pay your bail ;).

that wAs great advice; reed my story!!!!! (sorry, I just couldn't help myself ;))

I read through it, and I have absolutly no idea what's going on :). But hey, I was never really all that good at this sort of thing anyway, so ...

I'm not sure I like the whole raping her cunt with a knife part - not because it's violent/explicit, but because I have a certain distaste for adding sex into ...

I'm actually not supprised that you found the begining quite slow. I quite liked the very begining part, but couldn't figure out how to then connect it to the killing ...

Heh, the title really grabs your attention here :). I really enjoyed reading this - can't think of anyway to improve it. It all flowed together well, was all clear ...

Print this off and read through it. Wherever you naturally pause, add in a comma. I agree with Supermal - this does feel kind of rushed. However, go over it ...

Although this is quite good, it doesn't read like fiction. You started a new line after every statement, so you end up reading this more like poetry. Also, this confuses ...

Just Goat is still dead :(.

I believe part of the problem comes from our very most basic instincts - humans are pack animals. If we look at over pack animals (wolves, monkeys etc), we find ...

Sponson, you are aware that men can be blonde too, right? Most blond jokes don't specify the gender. Some specify the blonde as being male, just as some specify the ...

Out of pure curiosity, how would the male's have to be positioned to be as bad as these? Someone said they'd have to be touching themselves - which really isn't ...