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Hello :). ‘To one schooled in the Sight such illusion was ripped away and the roaring, crackling power of the barriers was revealed.’ - I think it could do with ...

Hello ^_^. ‘It was coming closer. A tall figure coming slowly as if a lion was ready to pounce on its prey. Autumn was trapped in the corner of a ...

Hello :). ‘There once lived some people’ - Not the most inspiring first words of the story. The rest of the sentence is an improvement, but still lacks quite a ...

I believe it would be for the best if you were to cut out the entire prologue (the first four paragraphs before the star line thingy). Trident is correct when ...

I agree with Vampirewolf3's points. Also, ‘The wind whistled through his makeshift abode scattering the tent flaps and giving this place a feeling of emptiness.’ - This place? It gives ...

I never know what I want...

I could tell you, but it's much more interessting to leave you guessing.

Reading this book will cause you to die.

Wooh! Happy birthday!

If the author has been dead for 50 (or is it 70? can't remember...) years or more, than it can be freely used.

:shock: Remind me to never mess with Snoink. :shock:

I've just been reading up on how the Harry Potter series is evil, and is used to lure children into the embrace of Satan. Evil!

Hello.

Granted. She murders you instead. I wish I had a pet monkey.

Granted, but only cos the world has blown up. i wish i woz a best selleng orthor!!!!!!1!!!1!!!1!!