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Hello ^_^. Just some quick observations: ‘His mind grabbed hold and with his hand moved down until the ladder touched the ground.’ - This is awkward sentence (not helped by ...

This is only an opening paragraph - it could probably do with a bit more ;). I'd say - connect the reader with a character here. Just heaping information on ...

They're cool, in a weird, alien-like kind of way ^_^.

'DEATH TO THE WEST!' screamed Santa Claus.

misspriss: Not helpful. Anyways, I'm gonna crit this (simply cos the title caught my attention)... but not right now. I have lottsa science coursework to do. If I happen to ...

I heard that joke as well. However, I didn't get it (I'm rugby-illiterate)...

[insert novel here]

Griff: I didn't say I liked it (I too think it's far more effective to use proper grammar). But it's still a style of (experimental?) writing that's used - and ...

Unrecompensed: Sorry if you found it offensive. I was trying to emulate the media (as can be seen in the opening and final line in my origional post). The 'dun ...

In very little time, five prostitues have been killed in Suffolk, England. And he is now being compared to the infamous killer (which was bound to happen). I believe some ...

Tin Fish: Some stories are meant to be read without speech marks - it's a style of writing (even if it's one I don't like). I believe the Color Purple ...

It's not quite as trivial as it may seem. There are a large number of large objects within the Solar System, and before this we didn't have a clear definition ...

This is Ted, /\______/\ | (())||(())| |________| | \/\/\/\/\/| | /\/\/\/\/\| |_________| Destroyer of worlds. (hah hah, that actually came out quite well)

‘A man slipping though an open doorway’ - ‘though’ = ‘through’. ‘This is sterling banter, but it doesn’t get us anywhere.’ - I didn’t really like this line. Although, to ...

Hello ^_^. ‘The temperature was falling already, a little bit bitter than before.’ - I don’t like this line. Partly because I don’t like the way ‘bit bitter’ reads, and ...