Sureal

Derren /3 ‘The lizards that crawled into the crypt would have devoured fresh bones away, he hoped Varzin was wise enough to know that because the skeleton was supposed to ...

Both unpaid - my plan is to start off with unpaid publications (done) and then to move onto paying markets. Yesterday (or was it the day before?) I submitted a ...

I think you have an obsession with parantheses. I suspect that is true :). Most the time they're not even needed, so I dunno why I keep on using them ...

- Although is a fairly strong opening, it’s riddled with errors. Incorrect punctuation, missing words and awkward sentences detract from the story, and this would be so much better if ...

Some points: - One of the first things you did in your opening paragraph was establish how both of your characters look. We don’t actually need to know this right ...

Yay, I don't like LOTR either :). I've read through the trilogy once (it was a present, and would have been rude not too), but didn't really enjoy. I've been ...

Liz, if you wasn't aware that you were Vernon's fiance, I'd be rather worried :P.

The Evolution of a Writer Not sure where - or rather, when - to start. So let us just run backwards in my own personal timeline, and let us examine ...

kaolin: Remember, everyone here only wants to help you. The entire point of this site is for us to all improve our writing. Looking over this thread, I can see ...

Not in the conventional sense of the term ;). Random thought: it'd be quite cool if the bones could be filled with not air, but a gas that is less ...

Ah, but those bones are filled with bone marrow (so aren't truly hollow), whereas bird bones are filled only with air :).

There was no option for 'Bond, James Bond' :(.

Wahey our first volunteer for castration with tweezers! Thanks Sureal ;) Keep your tweezers away from my bobbly bits :shock:.

Here’s a quick run down of part two :). ‘Scall was unfazed.’ - I don’t like this sentence. It breaks the flow of the dialogue and doesn’t provide any useful ...

There's a reason bones aren't hollow... 'Pterosaur bones were hollow and air filled, like the bones of birds.' - :) The Pterosaur are probably as close to dragons as you're ...