Superfreakazoid

I LOVED this. The ship metaphors were beautiful and the fact that you related it all to each other without overdoing it is fantastic.

seems kind of plain. But perhaps the simplicity is what makes the poem. I think these are the most promising lines: "She put a tear in her skin that night ...

Hee, clever. I like the format you used.

I like this. To me it's just the right blend of nonsense making a point. Of course, I have no idea what that point is, or even if there is ...

It's very cliche but I think if you did try harder you could produce a very nice piece.

Ha ha, cute in a preschool kind of way. Of course now it's stuck in my head.

I love the images this poem brings to mind. The last two stanzas were beautiful, but "she is but asleep" seems to break the rhythm a little bit in the ...

Thanks you all so much! I honestly didn't think this was good (honest) but I'm glad y'all liked it.

Thanks to all of you. That line was an older poem, but my writing really hasn't changed a whole lot, so i suppose that was a completely pointless and idiotic ...

I love this day I know this day Sunshine bouncing off uneven teeth Oh I love the way you smile Waking on this plane of you I’m saying to no ...

Choices are the worst to make, Since there’s so much to choose, To choose to be a friend or more, Or choose to win or lose. To choose between his ...

Serendipity. All the random pieces coming together in one beautiful, enlightened moment. Did you used to believe, too? Serendipitous. Two random people coming together in one beautiful, foolish moment

well, yeah, i write all rhyme-y and everything, it's just my style. Thanks, again...

'S'pose that's what I get for writing 60-second poems. Thanks for all the feedback, though.

They should have a 'fro-type hair, for the minority of people (including me) with 'fro(e?)s. Yeah. The selection's kind of narrow, but they're cool.