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Re: Lost In There
So here's the redux of "Cats Say Miao". Johnny, leaning forward in his seat, focused on the road ahead. He said, “You’re right, thank goodness it’s not a cross country ...
Oct 3, 2011 -
Re: Cats Say Miao
Johnny, leaning forward in his seat, focused on the road ahead. He said, “You’re right, thank goodness it’s not a cross country meet, or a scholastic bowl meet, or anything ...
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: Acceptance
This stuff is written for a high school short story class, and it's due tomorrow. Stuff like "ur whole story sux, rewrite it" isn't quite constructive. I'm looking for comments ...
Sep 18, 2011 -
Re: Defiance to Oblivion (i will change this lame title)
No question this is gold. Goodness gracious. I'm in a short story class right now, and I've been reading short stories by Hemingway and Salinger for the first three weeks. ...
Sep 4, 2011 -
Re: The Gap: Chapter One
The illuminating sun began to rise above the remaining trees, creating crowns of light on the houses and smears of orange along the foot-tall grasses and abandoned yards. Dew on ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: To Whom It May Concern version 2.0
This part of TWIMC is much more autobiographical than the first one (link ). It's basically a rant inspired by the girl I have a crush on and the resulting ...
Apr 7, 2011 -
Re: The Shift: Chapter 1 (Pretty much redid the entire thing)
Wow... Well, I do like where you're going with the story so far. It is somewhat original, and it sounds decent so far. The grammar and spelling can be improved ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Walker's reviews
Hey, can you review ?
Apr 1, 2011 -
Re: Wide Awake
Ah, well first I must explain a bit. A few of my friends have had problems with depression. I tried as hard as I could to understand what they were ...
Apr 1, 2011 -
Re: to whom it may concern
Alrighty, the new version is up at
Mar 29, 2011 -
Re: To Whom It May Concern version 1.2
Ramblings of a lost art student - after revision by a few YWSers. Thanks for the critiques! To Whom It May Concern: Gotta art-ify a cucumber for an assignment. It’s ...
Mar 29, 2011 -
Re: to whom it may concern
As SmylinG inferred, this is basically the rants of an art student in the raw. It is written in the style of stream of consciousness, and it's supposed to be ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: to whom it may concern
This is a quick bit of stream of consciousness after reading The Sound and the Fury. I wrote this in about an hour after being really tired at school. Hopefully, ...
Mar 24, 2011 -
Re: Causes of Revolution--for school, please help!
Most of this seemed alright. I prefer proofreading and spell-checking, but I believe I may be able to help you. This meant I taxed legal documents, magazines, newspapers, and various ...
Sep 6, 2010 -
Re: 55th Floor Chapter 4
October 5th came. Oregon was still cleaning its shores and waters. It didn't take long for Roberts to make his move. In a prime-time speech, Roberts announced his move of ...
Sep 3, 2010
