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  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Breaking Dawn

    Hm, it wasnt bad but it was a little bit of a downer on the rest of the books. I mean, fair enough, they lived happily ever after, yadda yadda. ...

    Oct 1, 2008
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: The Host

    I loved it to be honest... It was very original; I know I wouldnt have been able to come up with that. She truly captured the feelings of all of ...

    Oct 1, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: A Bloodied Rose part one

    Right, I'll just say I'm sorry if I repeat anything from what anyone else has said, but I dont particularly look at other's reviews until I've done it myself - ...

    Sep 19, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Ours

    Okai dokai. This is my review; sorry if I repeat anything that has been said in previous reviews, but I have to say I dont read them, and only read ...

    Sep 1, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A Quiet Evening in the Rain.

    Hooray for short poems! I love the amount of emotion that you've crammed into such a small amount of lines and you created a nice flow that works well with ...

    Sep 1, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Leaving

    I second the fact that you should capitalize your "I"'s, but I think that you used the punctuation in this piece pretty well. Okay, so here's my review; Picky things; ...

    Sep 1, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Panic (part two)

    Hey hey, so here's my review; Picky things. Okay, so I think the first part of your story was better than this, merely for the tension factor. In this, you ...

    Sep 1, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Leave me

    Hey there! Time for my review; Picky things; Okay so firstly, I didn't like the structure much, 'cause it all just runs into one big block and that makes it ...

    Aug 30, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: sacrifice

    This was a very good piece of writing! You need to capitalize some letters at the beginning of each line though, and also a little punctuation wouldn't be a burden ...

    Aug 28, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: wishes

    I agree with Sapphire here ont he statements side of thing. You have put across some lovely points, which would make the foundations of a great poem, you just haven't ...

    Aug 28, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Despair.

    Oof, okay a little bit a moan from me here, because this is what I usually do under these circumstances. I have a major problem with your stucture - this ...

    Aug 28, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My boyfriend =]

    I agree fully with Sapphire when she talks about punctuation and your capitalizing. Just make sure you do this and it not only makes the poem easier to read, but ...

    Aug 27, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: You are me - You are God.

    Hm, this is gonan be through the eyes of a teenager still struggling with what and who to believe, okay? So if I say I dont understand something, it may ...

    Aug 27, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Pure Friends

    I agree with Niteowl on this when she says about the idea of writing a poem with the theme of friendship. While it is an althogether nice subject to write ...

    Aug 27, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Chess Playing Dwarf

    Hm, I liked this I think, although I believe you could've made it a little more poetic. I don't mean in the sense of adding rhymes to it, I just ...

    Aug 27, 2008


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