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  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Supernatural Re: Stuck in the 80's

    There are several incomplete sentences and redundant words. Such as: Billy/anymore/when Use main character's name once per paragraph, and when using dialogue. When a character speaks use quotation mar

    Apr 14, 2018
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Horrible Day

    Hi Gloria, I noticed a potential issue with your first sentence. (The night before as I sat on my bed and started planning for the next morning,) This suggests too ...

    Apr 13, 2018


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