SuicideKing

You can get addicted after one try, or die on your first go. Why did this happen? It's sick. The commies did it.

A question and a quick note... Question: Sock, where were you going in your post? I find myself at a loss for a post, because I'm not sure which direction ...

--Mason Mason dropped a hand onto Moran's shoulder to steady her, then promptly spun her by that shoulder and walked her in the opposite direction. "Quite all right, liebling . ...

Seems Plot 1 is off to a rocky start. We need more than just myself and Little Sock posting.

Mason watched from his perch on the second floor balcony of the fine estate, observing the garden and waiting for the most opportune moment to strike. Dressed in the finest ...

Burger-- First of all, you've broken two cardinal rules of YWS. The first is you must critique two works before posting one of your own. Instead, you've posted two threads ...

I think, if I had to describe this drawing in a word, it would be O.O Which, while not actually a word, is a perfect imitation of the look on ...

Excellent as is. No real complaints from this reader. A suggestion, perhaps, I would add more in the story about the victim. Right now, there isn't a whole lot about ...

Great execution with a not-so-great plan. You wrote the piece well, but the plot itself was questionable. As it was noted above, there is really no reason why the child ...

Thank you, Kitty. Revising my character as we speak, to match the setting. --King

Akira: You probably shouldn't be so crass in your dealings with members. If I understand correctly, insults are not to be flung in the forums. You're being unnecessarily standoffish. That ...

Ps: Did anyone actually figure out the secrets that Akira hid in the notes to Yoko? Of course. The capital letters in the messages stand out like hippies in a ...

Interesting start. It needs more substance to it, however. More description, in particular. Character appearance, setting, and action all could use adding to, because right now everything seems very s

Our plot line needs a time period, please. "Historical Fiction" doesn't quite cut it.

Incomplete is a good word to describe this piece. In my opinion, you should write more, so that the characters and general setting become more clear to the reader before ...