SuicideCrusader

Interesting begining. It does catch your interest immediaely. I do feel that the explanation of who is who in the second chapter feels outta place or lacking Concern for Fang. ...

Hey Hey hey You cannot leave us hanging like this! I wanna read more. I was caught by how you state that a beauty had a beast in her. Later ...

Much too fast need details lota details. Thoughts what is going on in his head? He just woke up from a couple millienium sleep I don't think he is going ...

Quite an interesting concept I think you rushed it a bit when the towers were hit. That was a tramatic experiance and you seemed to lack that part. I do ...

Interesting concept. I would like to see how ths story would continue. In away I would like to see how she grows on the trip and on the planet. Her ...

Where is the next chapter? You now have my interest. Is the little cub alive? However I must say I would have stated the cub missing in the first sentence ...