StreetRat

Don't you know, My world's hardest without you? Won't you try, To at least give me some time, To tell you how I feel, Because my love is real. And ...

Almost the same exact thing happened to me. :O

If my brain had its own set of lungs, I'd scream how I felt at you. But since my mouth is mute and my hands are tied, I'd rather not ...

Alright, I agree with everyone else...I NEVER would have guessed that this was your first poem ever. So don't hide your face, you did a really good job, I'm not ...

Auteur: I know the opening line is long, but it's how I felt. The crime I commited, wasn't even a crime at all. It's just a guilty feeling of having ...

All of you--thanks for your nice words...and harsh criticism, but I'm pretty sure I've got this. I'm sorry that I'm not a writing major. But what I put into this ...

Man, I love everything that you write. I especially love the beginning. It makes the most sense in the world, and I'm sure a lot of people could relate to ...

I never imagined these thoughts would trouble my most internal organs. Never guessed I'd feel this way. When my heart bled, then bled again. When will my heart stop bleeding? ...

Smash my vanity, My insane sanity. Point your fingers and question my humanity. Man, I gotta be, Real, this can't fucking be, The life I'm supposed to lead. Everybody laugh ...

This is beautiful, and yes, you do have a good vocabulary. :)

I understand where you're coming from. My mom had some type of rare cancer, and I wrote her something too, although she never got to read it. I hope everything ...

Finding the words to describe onesself can be difficult, but you did it pretty well. Write on!

Every poem I've read of yours, has been amazing. And I love them all. Keep it up, dude. :)

Thank you both for your comments. I put the words "I might add" after "tragically" because I wasn't originally going to put the word "tragically" in there. You see what ...

Alright, Mandorelute, she's a young woman, and you're REALLY going to give her that huge of a critique? Seriously? Calm down. Not everybody can be writing geniuses like you. I ...