StoryWeaver13

This was nice, but it got better towards the end. I found the beginning a little typical and lacking emotion a bit, but it did definitely improve by the end. ...

Well, this was pretty awesome, man. The imagery, the thought in general, is pretty dang stellar. There aren't a lot of things to complain about, but I will say that ...

I didn’t get to sleep that night. Singing bedsprings wailed at my arising, saying, “Oh, but you’ve yet to close your eyes, poor girl!” Ah, silly me, I forgot that ...

This was good. Dark, but good. You had minor errors grammar-wise here and there (ignoring the southern slang, of course), but this was really the only issue I saw. The ...

So basically I'd originally written this around the summer, but I'm thinking of rewriting it and picking it up again. Looking for some general thoughts/critiques, so basically feel free to ...

Reddened anger, heart-wrenching desire, white with innocence, but black with fire. Blue with sorrow for it cannot be easy, yet yellow with sunlight that’s making us queasy. Pink for youth ...

Definitely interesting, I'm hooked into your story now. I think like most everybody I'm pretty tired of vampires by now, but your seems to be taking a unique turn already. ...

I thought this was really good. I loooved your second stanza, and the others were rock-solid too. The imagery seamed this together with a lot of articulance, so sadly I'm ...

Skye Driving up in my beat-up green Bug, I saw the school for the first time. Something about it seemed relieving, a good vibe radiating from it already. Maybe I ...

Yo Skins, wazzup? Well strangely I remember the original, even though it was like a million years ago, and it was pretty parallel to this from what I remember. A ...

There's seriously been some awesome writing on this site lately. This was definitely not an exception to it. This was really, really cool. Grr, I hate short and pointless comments ...

Whoa! Curb-ball! Even with the little side-note warning thing at the beginning, which I totally forgot about while reading this. ;) So, my general impression was, "Wow, I can totally ...

What a cool concept for a poem! I love some of the images here. I felt like there were a couple of places that could've flowed a little better, or ...

Based on the TV show "Bones," which my whole family watches (me included). Just kind of trying to write a piece as a fan, so give me your impression, whether ...

There were certain aspects of this that were really nice, and certain aspects of this that I just wasn't a huge fan of. The overall concept is hard to make ...