StoryWeaver13

This is good, I can relate. The rhyme's kind of off a little and is sort of simple, but still good.

I thought this was great, I love the imagery in this and the message I took away from it. Awesome. :) I especially LOVED the first stanza.

Like a couple of others already mentioned, a little cliché, but I liked that you used free-verse, which I've noticed a lot of people won't use. With free-verse, though, something ...

This is a great short story; something about it just has that heir of mystery and exciting foreshadowing. Your somewhat-simple style for some reason also makes it feel really personal. ...

This is an awesome poem, it has a great rhythm and message; it's worded really cleverly too. ;)

Man, this is awesome!!! :)I think this is a great poem; like callmeLily73 said, it really caught my eye and spoke to me.

"Success is failure tried one more time." ~Anonymous :smt001 I think you make some good points and have some strong ideas in this, but I also think that you should ...

I love the way you write, it's kind of old-fashioned, with more "antique" words than most will use. It was almost similar to a style of writing I'd see in ...

"I stared up at the watch tower; moss covered the crevices with a dark green colour casting long shadows across the rain splattered cobbled stone streets." -This is just my ...

***Hey guys, thanks for commenting on the one I had before! I tweaked it a *little* bit, but not too much, so...yup. Cool? Awesome. See, this is what happens when ...

Winie-- Thanks so much for the advice!!! I LOVE getting help on this stuff, so it really means a lot. I like a lot of your ideas, and I agree ...

Mind in the sky, My head in the clouds. They tell me to come back, To keep my feet on the ground. But why should I try To be like ...