StoryWeaver13

Hey Brea, welcome to the site! Have fun and get writing. :wink:

You know, I really don't get the critisisms. This was a good poem, and the message was great, too. I thought the rhyme was off a beat or two in ...

*Liked :lol: This made me laugh, it was really a random, crazy sort of way. I never thought anyone could merge WWIII, "Cullenism" (haha wow...) and Sarah Palin into one ...

You pointed out what's probably the main problem in this piece--I run off with my imagination yet again and leave others void of understanding! Sorry, I'm only going on about ...

***Sorry if there are any typos or anything, I wrote it up in ten minutes. Sorry if it's hard to understand, too, because to me it all makes sense but...well, ...

Yay, finally a novel that's got my complete interest! The title made this irresistably tempting to read...and from the first couple of sentences I was hooked on your characters' personality. ...

The cloud-heavy sky darkened as yet another stormy night approached outside the window, Elias Elderman shuffling through the papers on his desk. His meager income didn’t make up for the ...

Hey there, He was truly passionate about the instrument. This sentence just seemed kind of an obvious, bland statement. Maybe you could end on another note? (Oops, no pun intended... ...

There's a lot of dialogue and not a lot of details. Action/adventures are supposed to be fast-paced and exciting, but you also have to add enough detail for people to ...

His condition was growing rapidly Was growing? I think something along the lines of "rapidly deteriorating" would suit it better. Other than that, I didn't really catch anything. I think ...

Wow, this is really awesome. My only complaint is that something about the cat's tail bugs me, but I don't care that much because this is so cool. The colors ...

Controversial subjects can make or break a poem, story, etc., and you might get negative or mixed reviews partially because of that. I thought it was a decent poem, though. ...

Ooh, I like this! :wink: It was strange and wild (in a good way) but also felt oddly meaningful to me. I'm insanely intrigued to see what the heck this ...

The thing that bothers me is...I was waiting for that "wow" factor the whole time. Like I was expecting something exciting to happen. There was also too much dialogue, I ...

As the person above me said, if felt like you were too focused on finding a rhymne and not enough on really capturing that emotion. I'll also agree that the ...