StoryWeaver13

I thought this piece really said a lot, and definitely can relate to people even now when we're obviously not old and looking back yet. For the most part, rhythm ...

many questions. How often do you eat gummy bears? What is your favorite flavor? And why is this the first thing you let us know about yourself? But I suppose ...

Hahaha, oh I can't even tell you how much I agree! Being home schooled until last year I only recently went to my first high school dance, and must say ...

Buh-buh-duh: another poem about writing. Not that it's necessarily a bad thing, it just gets a little tiring. And this was a decent poem. My one real suggestion would be ...

Just a warning, even I don't know what to think of this. O_O Tell me I’m my name. Tell me that when you see a tree, you say to yourself ...

There were a couple little things here and there that just kind of threw me off a little bit. Here and there, things don't quite rhyme or flow or fit ...

It's been a while, No comma needed since I 've wrote a poem, No comma needed in this beat-up book of words. Maybe I've lost my magic, grown beyond the ...

Couple things. First is that this is just a big chunk of text, which even when it's this small can be a bit of a pain on the eyes. Easy ...

Okay, so you really need to add some detail to this. You have the story's skeleton, but give it flesh. We need the emotional appeal of characters and their perspectives, ...

This was verryy well-written, something that divides great work from mediocre, even when the plot line is the same. The plot seems quite interesting, too, though, although at this point ...

I hate short, pointless comments. But I only have one word. Beautiful.

“Oh, my dear, please don’t go.” “I’m built for war.” “Yes, love, I know.” “I’m ready now, to make a change.” “Don’t leave me here-” “Your voice sounds strange.” “It�

Wow, really cool idea here. Kind of sad and eerie at the same time. There was a really clear mental picture in my head, and the whole thing was just ...

My two biggest pieces of advice would bet to not start every line capitalized, and not to end every line with some punctuation. I thought it was kind of strange ...

This was definitely interesting. I love Edgar Allen Poe, so the reference was definitely cool, but anyway I was wondering about the choice of format. I felt like that made ...