StoryWeaver13

Freedom No longer simply-spoken For what is freedom? An unchained hand, An uncaged self? I do not understand for what is freedom if I am free of self but nothing ...

Yeah, like the other writer said, it just kind of lacked a consistancy. If I were you I would take away the rhyming completely, because really a poem doesn't have ...

Wow, and all this time I just thought my cat was lazy...I didn't know that he was actually on a path to enlightenment! :lol: This was really funny, and I ...

WOW!!! This is without a doubt the best art piece I've seen on the site! I'm insanely jealous, because you've got talent! I really have no complaints, this is so ...

It's kinda hard to review something so short, but I'll give it a shot anyway. I thought about what I had did Grammar! "Had did" should be either "about what ...

I thought the beginning was nice, sweet, and clever, but I thought it fell apart more towards the ending. The line "Now your really an angel horse but you had ...

Desert

Haha, I like these, and I can totally relate! I like the first one especially. These aren't really "art" so much, but they're still cool and fun to read.

To be honest, this sounded like more of a teenage angst poem than anything else. "I hate this, I hate that, etc." It just makes you sound like yet another ...

I think this is good, but it sounds like you just need to give your characters a little more depth. Give Eli a reason to be grouchy and pessimistic (maybe ...

You've gotten some really good advice on ways to revise this, so all I'm gonna say is nice job. This sounds really interesting and I'm curious to see where you ...

This is pretty good, my only suggestion is giving your main character some more personality. Of course, that could develop later in the story also, when she isn't so "tied ...

***A quick write, feel free to tear it apart. I walk the road, nowhere to go, Simply happy and on my way; For where I'll be In history Is not ...

Wow, I really like this, and I can definately relate (although I suppose that's not a good thing...) I agree, too: words are the greatest weapon anyone can possess. My ...

This is a decent poem, the only thing is that it's nothing...well, nothing remarkable. It just doesn't stand out amid the hundreds of others around here. The rhyme scheme's uninteresting, ...