StoryWeaver13

I'm going to disagree with the first reviewer and might sound a bit harsh ONLY because I think there could be so much potential for an idea like this. So, ...

ABAB, CDCD Letters, Rhymes I’m tired of These weary words Pressed to perfect Melodies and Schemes that leave No room for emotion, No room for me. And maybe I’m just ...

Honestly, I really really like this, even with my undying love for wolves. The way you worded with was just so intricate, it really captured my attention and the descriptions ...

Haven't been on YWS for a while, so I thought I might as well post something to get back into this writing-stuff. Leave a comment and I'll return the favor! ...

Life begins with no sight, no recollection of things past. Eyes open, and in slips Colors! Beauty! Textures! Hmm...not sure I like this part... (Along with the covert flimsiness of ...

To me this seems more like a condensed story, forced into an off-beat rhyme rather than a true poem. I mean, technically speaking it is, but you do too much ...

The hard part of a short poem like this is that you have to make that impact fast, which luckily you did. I really like the idea behind this, and ...

I LOVE the whole idea behind this, and for the most part it's really creative and open and emotional, which is good. The only part that really bothered me was ...

Hey, thought I'd return the favor and take a look at a random piece of yours. The first is good, and I really like the subject idea, but I'm not ...

The pics? Meh. They're not great. they don't have much focus and they're really just not that interesting or creative. The sketches, on the other hand, were really good. I ...

I was bored on this gorgeously-rainy day, so I decided to look for a little writing challenge. Went onto a place where I found a short-story challenge generator. Anyway, this ...

Hey there. :) Anyway, I think this is too weighed down by your rhyme scheme. A poem doesn't really need a rhyme to be a poem, it just needs a ...

Wow. These are really good. And you did this with pen? That, in itself, is intensely impressive. I don't really have any nitpicks, except that I wish these were bigger, ...

I think this has the potential to really get somewhere, my only thing is (and I think the first reviewer mentioned this) that you say they were all murdered the ...

Navita was spot-on with her review - "a seamless poem with tumbling imagery" (wow, I love that). It was wild and free and mind-boggling all at the same time, and ...