StoryWeaver13

I like this, it seems really emotional and honest, and the lack of rhyme scheme and intricate wording made it seem even more personal. This being as short as it ...

Okay, so the first part kind of jumps the gun and the character rushes straight into panic-mode. This could just be your character, but it seemed a little irrational, even ...

You make a mistake that a lot of people make - you do too much telling, describing and explaining. You keep us held up on unnecessary and sometimes irrelevant detail. ...

This poem was littered with overworked cliche and metaphor. That being said, there's something I like about the imagery of comparing someone you've lost to a dead rose. My personal ...

I noticed a lot of grim writing, not only on this site but as a pattern in a lot of writing. We humans spend too much time on the dark ...

Overall I thought this was good; there was something about it very...delicate about it that gave it a sense of innocence and purity. My main problem lies in this line: ...

Well I think these have potential to be better with more time and detailing, but they're not that bad. My one main suggestion would be to work on making the ...

Cute, funny, I like it all...EXCEPT the last line. That's just where it kind of turns commercial; suddenly I picture this on one of those cheesy TV ads or something. ...

This poem's OK for the most main problem is with the last stanza where you really lose hold of the rhyme scheme (which seems a little shaky and overly sing-songy ...

My first-ever attempt at a string of haikus, so please tell me if I messed up anywhere or if there's a rule that I missed. Thank you. :wink: Bluebird painted ...

I didn't expect to be so wrapped up in this story, but it was almost as if I'd become melded into it, a witness that walked the halls and lived ...

Well I thought this was pretty cute. Not really much to say, just...cute. :D My only real problem with it is that there were times it seemed to kind of ...

WHOA! Too bigg!!! If you're as clueless as me when it comes to all that technical computer stuff, resizing might be a challenge (although I doubt you'll completely crash the ...

Actually, as for the English version, I've seen worse on the site that WEREN'T translated from Spanish. My (very) limited knowledge of Spanish helped to translate for the most part, ...

Well, I liked the beginning a lot more than the end. This is because the beginning opened so vividly, using imaginative and open-minded expression, but that raw emotion sort of ...