StoryWeaver13

1st poem: It was nice, but I wasn't too keen on the voice. You try to catch the images of childhood but you talk so mature and old-fashioned that it ...

Rip it apart? Yay, I'm in a bad mood, time for some venting! Kidding...OK, so I see a lot of things that could just be improved the littlest bit to ...

I really like this. I think the last reviewer did a good job, so my only suggestion would be to maybe even add a little more detail about his family, ...

Yeah, the focus could've been better on the first two or three photographs, but they're still good. These are nice drawings, too, you've got a cool creative style there. In ...

So like the first reviewer said, the beginning's confusing but then it's cleared up, but I actually like that. I remember reading another poem of yours and I guess I'm ...

I thought Death was like winter, Just a passing thing. Grandfather, I hadn’t thought that I Would never get this chance again. So young, I was, on your lap Head ...

I'm not sure I got the whole message of the poem...I mean, I just didn't get what you were trying to say here. It seemed just kind of like random ...

I actually disagree with the first reviewer just a little bit, I got the whole feeling of unsureness and naivity through the whole thing, and it was really relateable to ...

OK, first things first, you could work on the grammar a bit. That's not a huge deal. My bigger problem is the voice of the whole thing. It just felt ...

One day I'll see a shooting star. I'l probley wish for something irresponsible, Like A car. Probably But like they say wishes never get you far. Life is full of ...

Okay, so I really like this. I know, I know, I'm supposed to be critical, but there was a rough rhythm to it that was really natural and cool. The ...

I agree with what the last person said correction-wise, so I won't go over all that again; I'll just say, this is a good poem. I don't usually like the ...

Shoot, I put it under short stories instead of novels!!! *sigh*....

2nd part of my novel. Read the first chapter or live without the knowledge of what the heck is going on. The day passed with no signs of Shadow. I ...

First off, welcome to the site! And if you're not that great at writing yet, no worries, when I first started I was terrible! This site helps *so* much. If ...